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naye ([personal profile] naye) wrote in [community profile] onepiece_300 2009-09-03 02:29 pm (UTC)

Oh, I love this! And, yes, I agree that all indications are that Dragon cares deeply about his son. He might be planning on using him, too, but from the brief glimpses we've gotten of him, I believe he does have a father's heart.

The way you told this was lovely!

My only comment would be to write out "World Government" instead of "WG" - nobody says "WG" in canon, so it's a little jarring to see it being contracted like that.

That said, it really was a fantastic first fic! Thank you, and welcome to the comm. ♥ I'm really glad you decided to join the fun!

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